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your welcome Scott and don't take my critque the wrong way I tried to give alternative copy where I could
Check out these cos
http://www.flex.net/~lonestar/ac.htm
http://www.littleredtrucks.com/
http://moderncooling.com/
http://www.dring.com/
http://www.airco.com/

BTW penguin, that is excactly what I wanted thank you very much.


Scott

Originally posted by The Penguin
So exactly how long is scott? No wonder Ronda married him
Did you all drop your pants and measure in the shop?

I'm Scott. Do you really want to know how long I am?

under the service details page
We want to Service the Customer and then the Equipment.
So you want to service the customer then the equipment
Well exactly how? seems kinda rude to me


I think your copy needs reworking badly on all pages
too many repeated words and phrases and bad grammer and missing words

how about a photo of your office/shop/service trucks on the home page
Change employees page to "about Us" and include a photo of the office/shop etc

So exactly how long is scott? No wonder Ronda married him
Did you all drop your pants and measure in the shop?

more links to the products would help as not everyone will put in a water furnace need to feature your full range of products here with thumb nails for furnaces heat pumps and acs etc
right now it looks like you sell tstats and water furnaces

over view page
need to mix it up
Doug's goal was a dedication to provide top quality service and installation. We provide sales, service and installation for the majority of the Shenandoah Valley.

change to: Doug's goal was a dedication to provide the best quality installations and service. As a full service company we offer complete sales, service, and installation (of the equipment) we are proud to represent to the entire Shenandoah Valley.
brackets insert the kind of equipment you sell

under employee page Tim change to Tim is our latest addition to our service dept. We are pleased to have Tim join our service team, Tim brings more than seven years experience in the field with him. He has learned the Rheam Team values and IS ready to help our customers right away.

Theres more But I'm sure you get the idea
there's too many repatition of "strive" and "top"

The mug shots did you lift them from their DL's ?

they all look kinda seedy low life types
Suggest new photos
take with good lighting and no flash, also get people to keep their chin down and ensure the photo taker is at the same height as the people (eg a 5ft woman taking a photo of a 6 ft 4 tech will produce an odd photo.
If you can afford it I suggest a professional photographer come to your office to take better photos

techinicans- mechanics your call I personally think techinicans is more appropiate
grammer errors : honeywell tstats (cares about you and your comfort -left out "about". Freon is a brand name refrigerant is more correct
adequately spelt wrong 14 on faq 15 on faq small animals WILL often chew through wires and also clog up the inside with debris and leaves- better grammer

service details - again bad grammer here
I think you need to rewrite this whole first paragraph
drop the s of the hours "we offer 24 hour EMERGENCY service
using "which" is a form of lazy grammer sentinces almost always read better without a "which"
Starting a sentince with: And, a build up ... just bad bad bad
This whole page should be reworked to improve grammer and sentince structure - shouldn't take much at all
overview page should read the office is located in the old napa building the work shop is located (next door or close by ) in the old fire hall
our sales dept is committed TO providing
Some one uses the wors "strive" way to many times -need to find an alternative word to mix it up a little
Monthly specials grammer error under fall specials

So how long is Scott anyway? need to rework the copy on him doesn't make sense
kenny -need to rework the copy here not quite making sense
Teresa davies -need to rework the copy -"teresa is works daily" huh?
Brandon - replace the "strives" ugh! to "excells"

Sorry about the brutal comments but you asked and I am giving an honest un-sugar coated opinion

Originally posted by rscamaro
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Originally posted by benncool

One town that I frequent quite a bit has their own web site that puts out all of the local info for the area and also links local businesses or just the phone numbers if no web sites available. An excellent idea, kinda like the local yellow pages on the internet. Take a look and see what I'm talking about.

http://www.warwickinfo.net/

...Ron

Our town does a pretty nice job of that too through the Chamber of Commerce. http://www.bennington.com/cgi/direct...NING&alpha=ALL

Jrbenny good job of critiquing. Man don't even look at my website I already know mine is crap............

You're selling a lot of equipment in relation to the number of techs there, is a lot of your work new home construction ?

Mike & Greg look like Hearty Partiers.

Nice site, flows well, things stay proportionate in different fonts and window and screen sizes.I like the FAQ stuff even though it's more helpful hints than FAQ. Definitely add to the referrals as quickly as you can;it looks light. You may want to put your full address up. Without looking at your profile here, I'm not real sure where you're at. You have a 800 number, so that's no clue.

I like it. Thumbs up.

Thanks gruvn, james. All our customers and vendors have been real good to us since the loss, we are the busiest we have ever been.

We are looking for another tech and two more install crews.

Originally posted by karsthuntr
Massive heart attack. It runs in the family. Dad (Doug's brother) had one at 43, Grandma has had three or four, my Aunt has had a triple and double bypass.

He had a heart catherzation scheduled a month before he died but the machine broke when he went to take it. It never got rescheduled. Dad"s heart doctor said the catherzation may have not showed anything anyway, we'll never know.

Sorry to hear that guy. The web site looks great. Pass these out at work.

Sorry to hear it,

Massive heart attack. It runs in the family. Dad (Doug's brother) had one at 43, Grandma has had three or four, my Aunt has had a triple and double bypass.

He had a heart catherzation scheduled a month before he died but the machine broke when he went to take it. It never got rescheduled. Dad"s heart doctor said the catherzation may have not showed anything anyway, we'll never know.

What did Doug die of ?

Thank you JRbenny that was what I was looking for. I have already noted most of those things you mentioned.

Note: I didn't do the site, the in house accountant did. She only had a week to get it up, but we have unlimited control to change what we want. Most of the things were copied and pasted.

Keep it up guys. This is what I'm looking for.

Scott

Originally posted by benncool
<snip>
I've had a website for my company for a couple of years now. I wonder how much business the site actually generates. Maybe I am old school. But when I want to buy something locally the first place I look is the yellow pages.

<snip>

One town that I frequent quite a bit has their own web site that puts out all of the local info for the area and also links local businesses or just the phone numbers if no web sites available. An excellent idea, kinda like the local yellow pages on the internet. Take a look and see what I'm talking about.

http://www.warwickinfo.net/

...Ron

I like the site. It has some good features, but....

Why is the Rheem team info on top? This is about your company! Put company info on the front page. Rheem team and water furnace should go to page 2.

Mug shots.

Have someone with excellent grammar read the site. There are a ton of errors. Heck, let your high school English teacher read through it.

Only one testimonial with all those years of business...??

I don't like something with the FAQ...it might just be the formatting...I'll get back to you.

Link the install thumbnails to pictures that we can actually see. Your photos are too small for someone that doesn't understand the trade.

I'd make links with the pics on the left hand banner. If your going to post the NATE badge, you might as well link to their page. Make it open in a new window.

Did I mention that I like the site? I really do. There are just a few things that I'd change.

I'm making a correction list now.

I will change the "mug shots" to candid pics.

I need to make hot links on the "products page" that open in a new window. I'll try and add a google toolbar also.

And I updated my little red house. Actually my house has tan brick

Thanks for the comments, but I need more constructive critisism.